To Write/To Right

Something new I was playing with.

To Write/To Right

 

To write     To right

The words,     The wrongs

With pen,     Of men

That fill      That kill

The mind      Their kind.

Of thoughts.      No thoughts

Giving      Given

To pieces     To peace

Of love     Or love,

When the heart rules.     Where only hurt rules.

 

 

Legion

21June08

Reviews

[TamiViolet]

Experimentation juxtaposes with genius, Legion, for I took a second glance and was delighted that I did.
Rhyme...toying with emotion, theme and word choice ( incredible word choice, I might add) ... leave
the reader with many intense thoughts... so many questions left to ponder. Compelling final line...
XXOXOXX

[Disa Sig]

I enjoyed this poem very much. It's unusual and beautiful in it's simpleness. Makes me wonder in a deep sort of kind of way.

smiles..

-Disa Igabod

[Last Lying Look]

Wow! This is really good I love it!!! Adding it to my favorites for sure. good job!

[Gandré]

This I have read vertically and horizontally.....both brilliant. Adore it. Stunning, how you are able to play in the structure of your language. One could write this when he can "see" what is yet not there....but might be. I am not able to write this in any language. I dream words and then they are there and I write them down (like most people do). This is brilliant, my friend, a timeless secret of lovers yet not uncovered to write with heart. We need love, yes! This world needs love.

[O!]

Very INTELLIGENT!!.....u should play more often! ;-)

savin' this one fo' sho'

x,
O!

[Berserker[Diktator Von ..]

Wow..ingenius once again..great job..I am a huge fan of your writing it is sooooooo good..great job...=0)

[White Rabbit]

Ah, I like this one very much. I enjoy reading the works of poets who play with their words visually as well as linguistically. Well done.

[doreen cyr]

I really like this, the form is cool
doreen

[Gaiamethod]

Very good. How to read a poem in three different ways........ Excellent. And actually, forgetting the form, the words: which is mightier? The pen or the sword?

[Dani California]

Magnificent! Absolutely love this...
It's unique character...
Word play...
Content...

The entire piece is brilliant. Bravo!