To Write/To Right

Something new I was playing with.

To Write/To Right

 

To write     To right

The words,     The wrongs

With pen,     Of men

That fill      That kill

The mind      Their kind.

Of thoughts.      No thoughts

Giving      Given

To pieces     To peace

Of love     Or love,

When the heart rules.     Where only hurt rules.

 

 

Legion

21June08

Reviews

[TamiViolet]

Experimentation juxtaposes with genius, Legion, for I took a second glance and was delighted that I did.
Rhyme...toying with emotion, theme and word choice ( incredible word choice, I might add) ... leave
the reader with many intense thoughts... so many questions left to ponder. Compelling final line...
XXOXOXX

[Y.F.]

It is clever, and true as well - you've written two parallel poems about two different subjects, and managed to create a strong link between them.
Each individual poem is really great, but the combination of the two makes the piece somehow more whole and stronger.
Very well played (pun intended). :)

[Kiya]

So clever! It made me smile =D and that's all that counts. A wonderful 'foolin' around' poem. I like doing the same with music - trying to fit together puzzle pieces. This one creates a really pretty picture. Well done! Kiya =)