The unsayable

Sloppy movement of my bones

on your oh-so-fragile skin

conducting wires through my fingers

like you've never done it before

challenging organs to obey your will

kissing a shivering freckle over my lip

creeping in as I curl up my limbs

like we've never done it before

Reviews

[Steven]

I so dig your style. Even in softness, there is that hint of brutality. And I think of small Eastern Europe kitchens with strong women and steaming copper kettles and peeled potatoes. That's just in general. Specifically, this piece should be a song. It's lovely and flames fortissimo the pianissimo in love. Delightful. Really.

[Mark]

very sensuous, packed quite a bit into a few lines. very lovely

[eglantine]

This is a beautiful way to describe making love. Only thing that bothers me is "Sloppy movement of my bones" I just cannot imagine bones being sloppily moved. They clatter and shake.

[Richard John Davis]

Awesome. Makes my bones sloppy

[Baby Ricochet]

I like it. Cool

[Horizon K.]

Oh so vivid sensual imagery here... I feel it!

[Stanley Wilson]

good vivid imagery

[spiritwind]

I like the strength of your images
no quivering wimpiness here
an intimacy without unveiling
you captivate without an outward sign of entrapment
you are so THERE
and accept nothing less than our total awed attention
fascinating
great write here

[lee von cleef]

Eraser ,cool freckle.

[SamanthaMarie]

Can I just put a

[SamanthaMarie]

Okay it wont let me, but I put a heart. lol

[That_Girl]

Gotta put a space between for it to work. < 3

[SamanthaMarie]

well, , < 3 < 3 over and over!