Elke Sanders Is NOT In Love

A Chapter by Lemon-Girl

Elke Sanders is NOT in LOVE and certainly not with her cute classmate named Izzy who has a perfect smile and warm laugh and pretty hair... NOPE! Not. In. Love.

I never considered myself one for romance

…

…that is, until I met a girl named Isabella

First thing you need to know about me: I’m queer. Lesbian, to be exact, and if you can't handle that then you can’t handle me.

Second: Isabella hardly knows me. We have english and math class together but that's the extent of our meetings

And third: I’ve never been so stupidly in love.

It all started on July 28th. I had pulled my sketchbook out of my backpack and was sketching dragons. Izzy had looked at me and then saw my sketches. “That’s cool!” she had said.

“Ah, uh, thanks-” I managed to reply. I never talk to others much. I always share too much and take the spotlight or I share too little and suddenly I'm hit with question after question because I was too vague.

“Seriously, You’re super talented. Even for an art student”

Oh, I should mention, we go to an art school. Cherry Bricks, school of visual and performing arts, to be exact.

My face heated up. I stood there silently blushing for a good 5 seconds before the bell rang and I sprinted off to my next class.

Oh my.

Oh my GOD.

What was that?!

Elke Sanders doesn’t do LOVE, Elke Sanders is the rowdy comedian girl in the back of the class with surprisingly good grades! Elke Sanders is a “NORMAL”, “STRAIGHT”, girl with no “sinful” crushes whatsoever (Let’s be real, the closet is glass but as long my parents don’t know then I’m fine)

It couldn’t be love

...But why did it feel like it was...?

I mean, Isabella's smile IS pristine

and her hair is black and wavy with pretty red streaks in it that make her look like a goddess when the sun hits it...

...and her laugh is so sweet...

HAHA

BUT WOWIE, THIS CERTAINLY ISN'T LOVE

NOPE

Elke Sanders doesn't do LOVE.

Elke Sanders has never felt LOVE. Elke Sanders is NOT in love.

Nope.

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© 2025 Lemon-Girl

Author's Note

Whattaya think? I typed this up at 3 am and decided to just post it.

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LH Weiss

This is so sweet, I was actually smiling while reading. It doesn’t fall into sapphic stereotypes, but it’s still so recognizable and relatable. I would love to know a little more about our main character here, but perhaps that’s coming in a part I haven’t read yet.

Posted 1 Month Ago

JayG

Well, you did ask...

• “That’s cool!” she had said.

"Had said? The past tense of the past tense? Should be, "she said."

But that aside:

The protagonist has her work complemented by someone WE know nothing about, and who SHE barely knows. And BANG she's in love because of it? In love with someone The reader has no image of. And that's it?

You've missed some critical points:

1. The only one in the entire world who knows the emotion you'd place into your storyteller's voice, the expressions that would illustrate that emotion, the gestures that would visually punctuate, and the body language that amplifies or moderates it, is you. The only one who knows if this is middle school, high school, or university is you, because you’ve given the reader no context, and are playing storyteller in a medium that does not reproduce either vision or sound. So NONE of your performance makes it to the page.

But to work, the reader would have to hear/see your performance. And with you not there to perform, the ONLY alternative is for the reader to read and perform as-you-would. But they can’t. Have your computer read this to you for a better idea of what he reader gets.

2. You’re presenting this in overview, summation, and explanation. But when you read fiction, is it to learn what happens, or, to be made to feel as if you’re living the events as-they-happen?

Certainly, I support your desire to write. But to do that you can’t guess. Commercial Fiction Writing is a profession, and like any other, its skills are acquired in addition to the report-writing skills we’re given in school. Those school-day skills are no more up to that task than can you perform an appendectomy with the skills given in Health Class.

Remember, they’ve been refining the skills of fiction for centuries.The pros depend on them because nothing-else-works...even for hobby writing. So...if you dig into them, you’ll be taking advantage of centuries worth of tricks and techniques. But skip that and you’ll re-discover all the traps they learned to avoid...never knowing it’s happening.

So grab a good book on how to add wings to your words, like Jack Bickham’s, Scene and Structure.

https://archive.org/details/scenestructurejackbickham

Jay Greenstein

Articles: https://jaygreenstein.wordpress.com/category/the-craft-of-writing/the-grumpy-old-writing-coach/
Videos: https://www.youtube.com/@jaygreenstein3334

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Posted 4 Months Ago

Well, you did ask...

• “That’s cool!” she had said.

"Had said? The past tense of the past tense? Should be, "she said."

But that aside:

The protagonist has her work complemented by someone WE know nothing about, and who SHE barely knows. And BANG she's in love because of it? In love with someone The reader has no image of.  And that's it?

You've missed some critical points:

1. The only one in the entire world who knows the emotion you'd place into your storyteller's voice, the expressions that would illustrate that emotion, the gestures that would visually punctuate, and the body language that amplifies or moderates it, is you. The only one who knows if this is middle school, high school, or university is you, because you’ve given the reader no context, and are playing storyteller in a medium that does not reproduce either vision or sound. So NONE of your performance makes it to the page.

But to work, the reader would have to hear/see your performance. And with you not there to perform, the ONLY alternative is for the reader to read and perform as-you-would. But they can’t. Have your computer read this to you for a better idea of what he reader gets.

2. You’re presenting this in overview, summation, and explanation. But when you read fiction, is it to learn what happens, or, to be made to feel as if you’re living the events as-they-happen?

Certainly, I support your desire to write. But to do that you can’t guess. Commercial Fiction Writing is a profession, and like any other, its skills are acquired in addition to the report-writing skills we’re given in school. Those school-day skills are no more up to that task than can you perform an appendectomy with the skills given in Health Class.

Remember, they’ve been refining the skills of fiction for centuries.The pros depend on them because nothing-else-works...even for hobby writing. So...if you dig into them, you’ll be taking advantage of centuries worth of tricks and techniques. But skip that and you’ll re-discover all the traps they learned to avoid...never knowing it’s happening.

So grab a good book on how to add wings to your words, like Jack Bickham’s, Scene and Structure.

https://archive.org/details/scenestructurejackbickham

Jay Greenstein

Articles:  https://jaygreenstein.wordpress.com/category/the-craft-of-writing/the-grumpy-old-writing-coach/
Videos:  https://www.youtube.com/@jaygreenstein3334

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