Der Turmfalke

a windhover or kestrel

The weight inside a dive : muscles work against the wind.

Motionless ignore the reduced ; a quilt of cornfields,

the bleached boxes of barns, holes full of gravel and

the mess of houses and lanes. So when

the heat rises and the earth scatters : heed the hunter`s eyes,

the blue irises ; the terrible beauty of the last seconds, sinking.

Reviews

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlande..]

I like how you can ignore the subject matter and this takes you within yourself...like I took "weight inside a dive" and my brain ran with it like a chipmunk scurrying for it's life.
I also like how the predatory movement itself kind of absorbs maybe a(n) (inverted?) euphemism for cold air shoving itself willfully towards earth and its target, because we all know heat rising is cold air shoving it out of the way...So yes, I'm seeing some fine clarity in the conscious movement and direction and the obvious imagery, but I feel like a little bugger on xmas morning and this poem's the tree and the hearth..I never had the latter growing up, so poem's like this will def do.

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks for the review, which I liked a lot, intellgent and perceptive, one of the best I have ever read of my poems, the sort of good review that only a good writer
can put together !

[Rosalind Gale]

Yes, he is certainly a clever fellow, Mr L-S-S-H (think I did not notice?)

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlander]

and I seem to recall trying to post a clever comment previous to this one, dang it. swallowed by the matrix I guess....derp...I was also swallowed by a spiderweb of glass at a young age and my feeble mind frequently overcompensates for that...really I'm just a normal guy with abnormal curiosities

[Samuel Jack]

Very energetic, like I could feel the power of being a bird of prey. Your poems always have such a classic feel. Definatly something I would aspire to.

[Keith]

Magnificent, we get to share the flight and look down on the shrinking shapes as we rise on a thermal.

[quinfinn]

this is magnificent in it's descriptive qualities. your wording is excellent and the piece picks the reader up like a whirlwind, takes them on an adventure of glee and terror and then lightly sets them down on solid earth. i was attracted to this piece by the title, being of German descent and having lived in western Germany for a time. a positively charged and wonderful write!

[Neville]

Fantastic, I almost felt like flying
Der Turmfalke eh
The olde English Windhover sounds more fitting or accurate at least to my ears, but hey
you have done good with this and gifted the reader with a birds eye view of what it must
look or feel like to hover in the air, to spot some quarry or other & then to plummet purposefully, 'the terrible beauty of the last seconds' & then Gotcha

All Good Things, N

[Eric Cox]

Unique, strong imagery. Very cool ending lines with strength to the finaly. Nicely done!

[Arabdha]

this is lovely...especially the imagery you create through words !

[Rosalind Gale]

It took me to a lot of places, the piece. Though mainly to younger days when I read 'Kestrel for a Knave' by Barry Hines - that was made into a lovely, moving, film called 'Kes.' - in a way, reading the poem, my mind was consumed by the 'knave' of the book, that quiet innocence of youth, a longing for love - and an eventual damning of the world, a death - and some realization that beauty is always broken. Like Frost's poem 'Nothing Gold...' In this sense, it was I, as my friend below states, that was taken within myself - and then out again. Thank you Leslie, another wonderful, understated, write.
Rosalind
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[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlander]

well said. and thanks for the movie recommendation; I would like to check that out

[Rosalind Gale]

Do.

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlander]

-.
ne.

[DIVYA]

Brings to mind a hunting scene, in all its wild beauty and raw intensity.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

"So when
the heat rises and the earth scatters : heed the hunter`s eyes,
the blue irises ; the terrible beauty of the last seconds, sinking."

i love these lines- they're beautiful and heart-wrenching at the same time