Flooding In Kaschmir

a difficult poem, I know

At twentythirtyfour

On the eleventhofseptember

           a neuropathological tracer

Jumped from the box

Lost poem; a title over rain

           men waving tins at a tractor;

And the later sleeping without

Rest; rooms full of waves;

          the ineluctable modality of water.

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

It makes one wonder if there isn't some evil hovering over that date now, or just another horrible set of coincidences. I think for me this speaks to the way we hear these things in the periphery -- running into each other, the horrors and tragedies of the world.

[stars are far]

that was very creative and greatly done.. well done

[Coyote Song]

Very well done. I love the ay you wrote this. The reader just can't skim over this they must look a little deeper and take a little bit of time. I think it is a splendid poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and the flooding takes place, 9/11---in Kaschmir...

just as the flooding of terrorism swept the states when the planes hit the towers..
I like your use of "jumped from the box/ a title over rain"
and how that parallels what was on the black boxes of the airplanes...as they swept into the skyscrapers.

this poem connected to me very deeply, even if I was not in Kaschmir...

excellent writing...only difficult in the sense of dealing with such strong emotion.

jacob

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks for the astute review, the 9/11 connection is, I have to admit, not really planned, I just wanted a kind of indirect tribute for the Kaschmiris, and booted in a line of misquoted Joyce at the end !

[Jeremy Baker]

The form and structure of this text is intriguing, and the oblique meaning and allusions tease me relentlessly. It's going to take a while to digest this, I think. Masterful write!

[Leslie Philibert]

Dear Jeremy, thanks for the kind words. This is a bit of a mess, I know, a strange kind of tribute to the
Kaschmir mixed in with a dream about water and a bit of half stolen Joyce at the end. As ever, best wishes !