Moor Girl

Inspired by Seamus Heaney

Feral as leather

Sculptured as a scarab

Curved as a burnt twig

Asleep beyond the punishment

Each tress solid with peat

Flaxen as old corn

Perhaps you softly breathe with water

Under the door of the Moon

Still as the night is rain.

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

I love the imagery and flow of the piece. The last stanza is particularly beautiful.

[Coyote Song]

A fantastic poem. Your imagery brings the character to vivid life. Such impressive writing!

[MomzillaNC]

Evocative piece. Interesting imagery, especially in this line: "Sculptured as a scarab"

[Tina Kline]

Love this impressive write. This poem is a treat to all the senses. Impressive work!!!!

[stars are far]

yeah that reminded me of Wuthering Hieghts.. it was agreat read well done

[Lydia Shutter]

You touch on all the senses in this one. The imagery is superb. Wonderful. Lydi**

[Jason Henry]

the language is so exquisite. the picture was painted and the mind, fixated. superb!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Feral, wild, self-sufficient enough to survive...curved from life's harshness and pain...yet tough as a scarab--i used to wear a scarab...you paint her solid and strong, yet with a softness underneath...that stillness...

i could really feel these words...you create wonderful images...sight, sound, taste, touch and smell...

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks for the kind words, the idea comes from Heaney`s`Punishment`....the difference being, his
read moreThanks for the kind words, the idea comes from Heaney`s`Punishment`....the difference being, his
poem is brillant, my poem not !

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I like your modesty, but don't sell yourself short, Leslie...you are one of the best poets on this site...consistently.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This indeed has shades of Heaney in being able to stimulate texture and smell by the written word. This is a graphic poem though with your own stamp upon it Leslie in its pace and use of metaphors.

[Leslie Philibert]

As ever, thanks for the kind words from a poet who hasn`t a chance in Hell to write as well as SH !

[highonwords]

great caricatures of imagery in the first stanza followed by a glimpse of a moor girl's perhaps fierce veneer, her pale yellow locks of hair covered with peat..and the interlude of soft rain against the backdrop of a savage land....thank you for sharing :)

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks for the kind words, the poem inspired by Punishment from Heaney, a poem that has all the
read moreThanks for the kind words, the poem inspired by Punishment from Heaney, a poem that has all the
quality this doesn`t !!