Five Frames About Being Alone

isn`t it great to be alone ?

A supermarket carpark;

Sunday morning,

flat and empty as my breath.

A room tiled and bare,

a cell cool and angular,

all light hushed.

A circle of trees

stand around me as a victim,

head back I shout at the sky.

The autobahn near Aschau,

lights spot the midnight.

The few hidden from my touch.

Of course. The last one.

Through mist I hear soft voices.

My fingernails break on a sill.

Reviews

[Coyote Song]

A very descriptive and moving poem. Being alone when you don't want to be is very painful indeed.

[Valentine]

Being alone, no hugs, no kisses, no smiles, no 'I love you , no 'whats for dinner?"

[Ruth]

So descriptive, really stole my breath! To be alone can be an eerie sensation I find at times...always something in the air to be felt and summon an energy unknown, brilliant! :)

[Beccy]

As jacob says, there is bad and good in being alone. Sometimes solitude brings peace, other times a desperate loneliness.

Each verse is very descriptive, the first, especially so as I found it easy to relate to; and the last is very powerful.

Beccy.

[Tina Kline]

A very well done poem. Your words capture the feelings of being alone. Sometimes we need alone time but when we are alone and wish not to be, it can very very painful and create fear in some situations.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you capture the good and bad of being alone here...i have been alone often in my life, but never really feel lonely...there is something peaceful about being alone...

and sometimes there is relief in that deep breath we take alone.

other times the being alone can feel almost spooky...and those fingernails breaking on a sill reminded me of premature burial...the person waking in the coffin and destroying fingernails until the last breath.

[Leslie Philibert]

Hallo Jacob...thanks for the review. I`m not sure I like my own poem much, a bit cliched, a bit obscure, OK maybe but not the quality I want to achieve, but I`m working on it !

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like these segments...but i understand what you are saying...we are always our own worst critics...sometimes the nicest reviews i have gotten here are on pieces i was close to tossing.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Being alone has indeed many faces Lesley and you capture some poignant examples in this piece. The opening stanza I could see so clearly having been there and the third as I have sought tranquility in the forest. The fourth I recount from my early morning trips on the M1otorway to catch an early flight and the last is a place we all hope to avoid.
There is one 'neologism' and perhaps it should be a word lol- 'emplty'

[Leslie Philibert]

Hallo John, thanks for the kind words, and the typo is out !