Grey In One Line

sad

Looking over the pale fields

and old woods, I recognise

                   this can not be

                   the consequence of birth,

more a late push under winter mud,

as if I am as thin as cardboard,

                   one of no depth,

                   desolate as sleet. 

Reviews

[Valentine]

Thinking of all of earths disasters, this says very much in a few words. Valentine

[Rosalind Gale]

Dear Leslie, I love this little poem. Some may find it sad, true, but I find it uplifting and grand, a cold chill blew through my room as I read which made the poem come alive in a way I had not expected. You are a true poet.

Thank you -
-x-

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

""more a late push under winter mud"

most significant line here, imo...it's the most straightforward in depicting your depression.

[Lyn Anderson]

Looking out into my own grey world of spring, I equate this to both the outer and the inner depression -- it is hard to feel good when you are stuck in the mud in a world of grey.

[Tina Kline]

A very haunting and chilling poem. This is the way life ends, for all. Expect for those who pass before they reach the winter of their lives. All life.

[Coyote Song]

You paint a very emotional picture here of the reality of life....were here, young and then time starts taking it all away.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the way you write...you have incredible depth...but i understand this feeling...i often have that feeling of thinking my depth disappeared a long time ago...or maybe those woods were ones i always ran out of...as i aged...now i search for something...

j.

[highonwords]

very stark imagery, which strengthens the somber tone of this poem - i love this

steph