Traped

I don't know how much more I can take,

Befor my heart finally breaks.

I have put up with so much.

But I'm already addicted to your touch.

I want to say goodbye,

But saying I wouldn't miss you would be a lie.

Your love is like a stain.

Trying to rub it away would only cause pain.

I JUST WANT TO SHOUT!

I need a way out!

I just dont know what to do.

I guess I'm stuck with you.

Reviews

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Beautiful, as always I can definitely see your personal and unique touch in this poem :)
Just two misspelled words: It's "trapped" and "before" :)

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Okay I like this! First off, the title is supposed to be *trapped*
(Befor my heart finally breaks) -- *Before my heart finally breaks*
Other than those minor mistakes, this has a nice flow and an excellent rhythm to it! Great job. :D

Ashley Rivers-- your friend ;)

[hopelessromantic]

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[Forgotten]

Firstly line 2, you have spelt 'before' incorrectly. Ok to the review, I really love it, I know how it feels to be so in love and trapped within your own relationship and the pain you feel with them yet knwoing to be away from them is also the worst thing imaginable. I love how you portayed your emotion within this peice. Two thumbs up from me :)

[Secret Lullaby]

Thanks for the review and yes I will fix that lil problem as soon as I can

[Nicholas Antonio Young]

This is very good :) Well done!

[Secret Lullaby]

Thank You (:

[Rhea752]

wow!! powerful and emotional. great job this poem is amazingly done!!!! :D

[Secret Lullaby]

Thanks (: