Hidden Lie

                My story has never befor been told.

                       I am a lie that is very old.

                I needed to hide to save your tears.

           Because my truth would awaken your fears.

 

 

Reviews

[Team_Jaward_Gale]

Omg so short but full of thought and intensity

[eatmills]

This is a tease of something bigger for sure. A riddle to keep us wondering what was that truth? The structure doesn't match the flow that is all.

[Andrea Vargas]

I reallly like this, but I beleive that you could do so much more with it. I agree that the flow is a little off, It feels as if you started off with something amazing but it abruptly stops semding your reader astray and missing the pint. I think its a beautiful start.

[Rhea752]

very intriguing... i do not agree with P. J. P. i felt it had a nice flow. well done... very enjoyable

[Secret Lullaby]

Thank you!

[Justin Flume]

I don't feel the flow.
But it's good.
I just didn't feel the flow. I thinks that's why i kinda didn't understand or feel it completely.

80/100
P.J.

[Secret Lullaby]

oh ok i guess thats your opinion ...but thanks for the comment

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

A great and interesting poem to read. Every line made me think for sure. It has a nice flow and rhythm! I like this very much. Promise me to keep up the good work? XD




Ashley Rivers-- your friend ;)

[afra]

short but deep ....well done

[Dr. Wood ?]

It's a puzzle, isn't it? Can there really be truth in lies? I suppose if you admit to being a lie then you are indeed being true....This poem makes me think..and I don't usually do much of that

[Secret Lullaby]

haha glad I gave you something to think about (: