Meagre Living

Man has Incredible Adaptability.

Each day is a precious gift.
My life a torturous rift.

The sun rises and brings the hope.
Then it falls and I begin to grope.

A man stands courageously against the horizon.
He then goes mad as it fades into darkness.

What sustains him yet another day,
Is morning's dew, first sweet kiss.

If a man can find solace
in a sun that never shines on him.

Then is it any wonder
he gains comforts
from a Camel's sweet warm piss?

Reviews

[*~DreamDeamon~*]

All i can say is Wow! i love your writing!

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Great poem - i was reading it so seriously , and it does have that and makes a good point - them i read your last line and had to laugh .. GREAT!

Chloe

[Murisaka]

harsh, disparaging almost even with the funny twist, but such is life as we know.

[Zack Burton]

I'm not a huge fan of the awkward rhyme scheme, but you did an excellent job with the wording, and the theme is very good.

[Tasha]

This was beautiful, funny, and sad, you did an outstanding job.

[Searching 4 Serenity]

The ending makes this both funny and very sad. Sad, because many people who do have the money and... comforts don't give a s**t for those bathing with camel piss.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

I just about fell out of my chair laughing at the last line.............wonderful!