The Seven Deadly Sins

The seven deadly sins

I make sure to exhibit them all

With sloth I relax

And take the time to care for myself

Greed keeps me from wasting my money

And pushes me to earn more

Anger keeps me strong

And prevents others from walking all over me

With lust comes the pleasure of men

And I keep myself satisfied

With gluttony I can taste every country

And experience sweet and savory

Envy drives me to do better

Until I win what I want

And pride does the most for me

It helps me stand up straight

In the face of danger

And helps me battle

Those who aim to harm me

Pride keeps me tall

When the safest thing would be to fall

Reviews

[Jade]

It helps me stand up straight
In the face of danger
And helps me battle
Those who aim to harm me
Pride keeps me tall
When the safest thing would be to fall


KEEP ON STANDING up for your beliefs....
This is so well said and so well stressed outward.
I really like this write, nicely presented

[Abhishek Izy]

Aren’t we all laced with sins as you say and much more. Maybe you didn’t recognize but you penned down a very spectacular lines which I quote

“Pride keeps me tall
When the safest thing would be to fall”

That’s a powerful statement!!

Nice write!

[Miss Peter]

A lot has been said about this one, and I understand why. It touches something withing me.I often struggle putting myself first. It reminds me, sometimes it's okay to sin. It's okay to take care of myself, my needs, my wants.

No one should be scared to love themselves and take care of themselves. Thanks for sharing.

[BlackPrince]

I guess you allude to the natural equilibrium of life. Self-love, self-protection, self-esteem, self-sufficiency, self-drive, and balanced self-indulgence are all aspects of our lives which draw on (one way or another) the seven dealy sins. You are being true to yourself, without hypocrisy, when you point out this notion of how the 'seven deadly sins' are intrisincally linked with our biological make up and behavioural characteristics, as survival and defence mechanisms,
so long as the general welfare and love of humanity is our genuine and appropriate intention.

WELL DONE

[Askew]

I love getting feedback from people such as yourself on here, because I know how much trouble I'd get into if anyone from my 'good Catholic school' read any of my writing, but especially this one. Not only that, but I also love hearing that others share my opinion that the seven deadly sins are not necessarily sins if they are not excessive traits one portrays. Too much of anything is a bad thing, but in moderation anything can be good.

[red.evangeline]

I enjoyed reading this. The way you turned around the concept of the sins was interesting and I think held a lot of truth. Often things that we might consider "bad" or "wrong" or "to be avoided" are actually necessary. For example, as you pointed out, nobody would get anywhere without a little greed or envy.

[Askew]

I wrote this in sort of a fit of rage while in class one day. I go to a Catholic school, and I'm agnostic, so I don't agree with a lot of the things they teach us. One of my teachers started talking about how the Sins in any form will lead to our demise. I wrote this to prove them wrong.

[trying_to_write]

I am so in love with your writing abilities, you're an incredible writer :) and this concept is so well written in the way it flows and is formatted.

[Askew]

It makes me so happy to hear how much you enjoy my writing, thank you so much!

[Davidgeo]

The movie "Seven" will always be one of my favorites.

[Iam-me]

Great write, wonderful scripted and displayed. And projected. Great advice held within. About pride for oneself.

[Amaya]

I really like this, especially the ending where you wrote about pride. Nice work!