That Night

About a girl describing the bullets going through her house. Its for this movie i saw.

She lies in her bed

Covered in blankets

Wondering who might be dead

She was used to the bullets

But her siblings weren’t

They started to cry

She could see that they were hurt

But she wasn’t going to lie

By saying “everything will be okay”

She knew nothing was in this place

Where her parents chose to stay

No one here showed there face

The shooting had stopped

She looked to see what was going on

She watched bodies be dropped

She wondered if her life would go on

Author's Note

It's a bit choppy but i haven't written in a while. So give me some helpful feedback.

Reviews

[Impulse]

Eh, this wasn't one of my favorites but it creates some nice imagery in my head. The flow wasn't quite that bad though. Good write =]

[Sexy P3nguin]

Like you said it is a bit choppy. But it dose have some amazing word choice and description. The story was very well told as well Great Job