Angles

The day was bright with the sun just over the horizon. Marday a talk dark man was sitting in the sand of the Deseret praying for his daughter and son had just died from leopardess. Marday looks to the sky above where it was a painting of bright oranges and yellow and said "why god ;why me ?!" Marday screamed at the sky in rage. His wife Anew ran to her husband "my love do not be angry with The Lord for now he has our children where they are safe from disease or pain ; Marday my love you should thank The Lord for he ended our children's pain". Marday shook of his wife " I am pleased that our children are in no more pain, yet The Lord has broken his deal!" Anew hugged her husband " I know dear but your still god is always right". Marday stood up and spread his angle wings to speak to the lord "I know love yet a promise is a promise". Anew kissed her husband before he flew up into the heaven and whispered " I love you" Marday turned and smiled "I love you too ; I'll be back soon". As he flew to speak to god his wife shed a tear for her children and her distraught husband.

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[C. Rose]

VERY IMPORTANT EDIT!!! Angels not Angles.

Whenever I see your username I get the song "Head Shoulders Knees and Toes" stuck in my head.

The day was bright with the sun just over the horizon. Marday a tall dark man was sitting in the sand of the Deseret praying for his daughter and son who had just died from leopardess. Marday looks to the sky above, a painting of bright oranges and yellow.
"Why god? Why me?!" Marday screamed at the sky in rage.
His wife Anew ran to her husband, "My love do not be angry with The Lord for now he has our children where they are safe from disease or pain. Marday, my love, you should thank The Lord for he ended our children's pain".
Marday shook of his wife "I am pleased that our children are in no more pain, yet The Lord has broken his deal!"
Anew hugged her husband "I know dear, but you're still god is always right".
Marday stood up and spread his angel wings to speak to the lord, "I know my love, yet a promise is a promise".
Anew kissed her husband before he flew up into the heaven and whispered " I love you".
Marday turned and smiled, "I love you too. I'll be back soon". As he flew to speak to god his wife shed a tear for her children and her distraught husband.

leopardess??
but you're still god is always right???
Consistency - If you capitalize The Lord you should also capitalize god.

Positive - clever how for the first half of the story you did not know he was an Angel. Is she an Angel? Are their children Nephilims?

[Kamari's]

This story will be a book more composed this was just a preview and no she is not an angel and yes there children were half angel