Ponder

Inspired by Judy the unrelenting horror of a so called "mother"

Trapped is the mind of shallow ground
Deep is the freedom of truth
Hard is the heart that keeps its own
Never to ponder the right 

Reviews

[Chris]

I paused here but don't know enough of your work to catch the references I guess... I understand the part of a shallow mind and how deep truth can be... and hard hearts are common - but thinking of what's right is a perception - right for one can be wrong for another or not as right. There is a space for intent as well... so as I said... I need to see more to understand the referents.

[BMColey]

i liked the short, blunt flow of it. altohugh this piece is short it still has big impact. nice work

[Leslie Philibert]

What I like here is the way you use words that have power and impact, freedom,truth,the heart, the right, these are big concepts that transport a lot of thought.
Good write.

[EMF]

Oh...you so need to expand this. As it stands it is damn good. It could be damn great. The venom is as sweet and pure as a vipers kiss, but it has so much to offer. It's wether you want to explore the emotion or not. But at the end of the day...what do I know? I tell weird stories. You're the poet.

[TKBickel]

I tend to like the poems that have a pattern in the words or the format. You have both until the last line which makes it stand out bold like an explanation mark.

[Antonio Valentino]

sad when we're not even able to ponder the possibility, of joy isnt it

enjoyed this, thanks so much for sharing it with us!

:)

[solo2be]

Short but you say so much with so few words. A very powerful piece

[Forest Green]

You have quite the unique way of bricking words, one on top of the other, in a solid poetic contemplation...

..ponder the right.

Nice..

[Rusty]

The mind of shallow ground... ponder the right.

[Wondering Mind]

Because I wonder a lot, the title "ponder" drew me to read. I'm glad I wonder, and I'm glad-er that I did read. You say a lot in four lines. Kudos