I Remember You

I remember you
not so long ago
seeing past my tears
and peering into my soul

you held me close
Your breath so warm
your soul open to me
your heart so dear

now your touch cold
your affection cold
your eyes cold
your heart cold

I miss your face
I miss your place within me
I long to know
what went astray

my soul lay naked
my heart is rent
my tears flow
where did you go?

I remember you

Reviews

[Mia]

"I miss your place within me"
This is a wonderful write! Tragic thing is most people don't end things abruptly...they drift off and when there is barely anything left they just leave. You're left feeling a little bewildered.

[Lighthouse]

It's such a sad tale that I hear too often. Nice writing.

[Wolfhilde]

passionate and sad but also beautiful. Very well written.

[Rusty]

An enduring question.

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Open and honest. The remembering of the sweet times are painful and perplexing when love has gone, especially when we don't know why. Well done.

[Distant horizons]

Beautiful, heartfelt, passionate words, perfectly expressed

[Liderien]

Thank you Mr Scotsman :)

[Distant horizons]

:-)