Will someone give me my closure?

I often look up at the sky,

Spinning, staring, aching, pining,

For a change, for something new,

I’m stagnant and it almost like I’m dying

When I see the world around me,

Walking, breathing, laughing, vibing,

A black, gaping hole in my chest

Is opened, forever expanding

Everyday I sit with others,

Talking, hearing, learning, burning

But I’m still hopeless and alone,

Always waiting for the love I’m yearning

For beginnings and ends, I’m always,

Waking, sleeping, living, dying,

It’s all I know, it’s all I do,

But should I really give up trying?

For something else to take over?

Wishing on four-leaf clovers?

For my hurt to spill over?

Will I know when I’m older?

Will someone give me my closure?

Author's Note

This is my first time trying to write a poem, I kind of imagined it like writing lyrics.

Let me know what you think!

Reviews

[emmajoygreen]

For beginnings and ends, I’m always,
Waking, sleeping, living, dying,
It’s all I know, it’s all I do,
But should I really give up trying?

When you're able to write so well, offering words that need to be known, emotions shared. you can't slip away. Your words need to be read, Lilian

[Sami Khalil]

I like the questioning aspects of this poem; we all should find our identity and place in this universe.
Let us leave the world a better place.

[Lara]

It's a fine first poem, Lillian. Expressive and yearning. Your piece reflects a genuine effort (even its structure) and succeeds in carrying your voice.
What else poetry should do, I know not.
Well done ✔️

[Davidgeo]

There is a difference between giving up searching and giving up trying. Never give up trying. It's okay to give up on the search for a while. It helps you try harder with the other things. Take your time, search later. Try now.

It's good writing man... it got me all emo and motivational. Well done.

[Aston Marley]

I love this poem with passion, the message is clear and it's very refreshing.

[Lillian Burrows]

Thank you for reading!

[Aston Marley]

You're welcome dear. Keep writing.

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Whaaat first time!?!? You are so good! Ah I felt the EVERY LINE! You must grow with talent! This poem has a part of you, a great part of you. And a real pain talks. Please keep writing poems.

[Lillian Burrows]

Thank you for the lovely comments!

[Inkspire]

"It’s all I know, it’s all I do,
But should I really give up trying?"
Sometimes it's just feels like we are doing nothing.

[Lillian Burrows]

Thank you for reading!

[Serendipity Planet]

I think you did a great work, its a beautiful honest poem
:)

[Lillian Burrows]

Thank you for reading!

[The Unknown Sith]

This is good. To me it is the wanting of more when your young. You want that adventure, the anxiety if you will become what you dream, or meet the one that you dream of. It is easy to say calm down,enjoy the moment when your old. Impossible to do when your younger.

[Lillian Burrows]

Thank you so much for reading!