Simple Joys

Joy in every breath I take

Lying by your side.

Pain in every joy I fake

When distance is between us.

Love in every thought I send

Winging your direction,

Peace that fills my heart no end

When I think upon our future.

Lightning that  shivers through my spine

At the touch of your lips

Alighting gently, passionately on mine,

Your eyes shining your love.

Author's Note

I quite liked the quirked rhyme scheme, want to know what everyone else thought... plus the usual thoughts on it if you please :)

Reviews

[Nate]

I agree fully with Mr. Dickens review L, poetry is defined and refined by its ability to remain true to itself. This piece possesses that rare beauty. Great Write!

[R J Askew]

Great stuff. I like the title and the theme as the joys you describe are at the very core of life. Without such joys we are not fully alive. OK we can't live in ecstasy 24/7, but it is great when it does strike. Like the last four lines the best.

We tend to make everything far too complicated. Simplicity rules!

[Samuel Dickens]

I'm not a stickler for rules when it comes to poetry. If it sounds good and rolls of the tongue well, it's fine. This one does that. It reads well, has good rhythm and conveys a clear message.

[Frank F. Atanacio]

aaaawwww sweet :)