Roles Reversed

I have loved you - you were my King.

I have kept my promise,
so now who's the defeated one

as I stare down into those forest eyes of yours,
laced with bitter self-loathing, disbelief
and sympathy for everyone who tasted your hurt,
both the bashful and the brass?

Abuser becoming the abused,
the hunted - my lowly prey.
Rather hide in the woods
for you're not the once invincible King

hoping that the reminiscence of your ruthless deeds
will be blessed with forgiveness.

Reviews

[Divinity Sleeps in This]

Sometimes I'm afraid to read you, in that, your genius might make me feel like I'll never write decent verse.

But how I like your turns of thought and easy lyricism.

I prefer it when you write with relational, emotive and personal content. Very good ending.

[Leslie Philibert]

Great ! One of the best poems you have written. I like short powerful works that
capture moments exactly , full of interesting imagery. The basic premise is also
clever and original. Well done.

[SilentDreamer]

Oh, beautiful. Nice use of descriptive words, and good word choice. Well done.

[Roary]

Strong, i love the table turn and the new found strength. Finding yourself in the dark, highly empowering.

[An owl on the moon]

There is a powerful transformation expressed in your words... one reduced, and one exalted... now to see if mercy or judgement will prevail... There is a gritty realism in your voice.

[Larry Dyson]

the true power is in forgiveness and you wrote this in such a way as to illustrate it beautifully..

[EMMIE]

SO MUCH POWER IN THESE WORDS! VERY WELL WRITTEN!

[TawnyBlueStar]

wow. love it :D love the second stanza

[Hotwater]

Sounds like a good tale of revenge... but done in a very poetical way. Good!
*bird*

[screamin'ian]

Very well expressed! Your desire for an evolved outcome inspires me. Keep up the good work!