Ticking time bomb

I am a ticking time bomb strolling through a war,
and yes like most wars,
i have lost what i am fighting for.

I am a ticking disaster finding my new cause,
and yes i was created with the best intentions,
is it love im fighting for.

I am a ticking clock spinning the hands of time,
and yes its never ending,
yet war was never deemed a crime.

I am that one lost general leading my lost team,
yes lead into a battle...


Where there was no ending,
where time was plenty,
and where we would never be seen,
only in the minutes of silence,
we would remember,
the fallen brothers,
the heartbroken children,
with crying mothers.

Lest we forget.

Author's Note

Its late at night

Reviews

[Aphy!]

Beautifully laid,really enjoyed reading this. I feel like this described and spoke volumes to me and as a poet that a skill you should be proud of (To be able to connect with your reader on a deeper level) I really loved it and felt like I was literally in a war. (Fellow ticking time bomb) Well done!

[Amber Lily]

War is an odd thing. They say its to make peace, but at what cost. Sure the countries officials may come to terms, but those who have fallen brothers on the battlefield will not what peace. and hate is reborn again and again. For both sides of war, there is truly no winner for the people who fight it. Thank you for sharing that mind opening poem :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Strong words and thoughts. The below words felt like a prayer.
"Lest we forget.
only in the minutes of silence.
"we would remember,
the fallen brothers,
the heartbroken children,
with crying mothers.
Lest we forget."
Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

I don't know how to feel about this. Its the first poem I've read by you and I have to ask, are you speaking directly of war on the whole or is this a metaphorical war you have in your head? I've been overseas with the U.S.N. as force protection and I have lost some friends. Is this your tribute to soldiers, to peace, or something else enitrely? That aside, the rhyme scheme before breaking into a spiral at the end was almost perfect. Some might use is and not was to describe a neverending war because of the fact it's infinite and will be condoned forever. Uh, last thing. These are my opinions and are not meant to be taken as a finality. I cn change my mind and I'd like to hear back from you first before solidifying it.

[Pixieblue]

More or less i was shouting at my computer and relatio it all togwther piece by piece, that how the whole world we live in has a never ending battle that we fight for other people and wait for a resolution that will never come.

[Tamika Finley]

Wow I love this because I hate war. People fighting in wars these days aren't even aware of what they're fighting for or what began it all.