Dear Joe

A letter, an advice, one last goodbye before letting you go and face the world.

(Well maybe I’m wrong but I don’t care)

 

Dear Joe,

before you go - don’t turn your back

and take your bag away

I’ll have to make you stay; see

The world ain’t spinnin’ round you

The world’s just spinnin’ fast

And we’re so young and old

 

Dear Joe,

remember that people are cold

They won’t even say a word of compassion

Don’t carry your distraction of

think that everything

is a mirror of yourself

It brokes and may won’t fix very well

The secret is to just let it flow

 

Oh but before you take your bag away

I gotta make you stay

and make you understand that -

The world ain’t spinnin’ round you

the world’s just spinnin’ fast

However, not everything is a bless

Keep your eyes open before you run -

We're always right and wrong

 

My dear Joe,

remember that people are bold

They will say whatever they

need to - win the fight - and make you

lose yr sight

So don't carry your distraction of think

that everything is a mirror of yourself

It brokes and may won’t fix very well

The way is just to keep it strong

 

Maybe I’m just too young,

Oh, maybe I could be wrong

Or maybe I’m just too old

But those words should have been told -

to you dear Joe.

Author's Note

A letter, an advice, one last goodbye before letting you go and face the world.
(Lyrical poem)

Reviews

Absolutely agree with Neva and Rikkevi .... very powerful poem .. though ideally you could have thrown in some positive points as well .. but then again , the ideal is not always realistic .. what you have written here is very realistic .. parents do this all the time ..
great work !! 100/100

[G!o]

I just can't get enough of this piece right here. This is really a talent shining at its best. Congratulation for winning the contest and really thumbs up for this amazing poem and thank you for sharing this amazing piece with the world. 100/100

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

I hear a song in this one.................excellent

[Magdelena]

I like the way you write. it is different and fresh. I find your work outstanding.. truly enjoyed this one..

Mags xx

[Arabdha]

what better advice than a lyrical poem to the friend's name..! Again,very well written..

[Richard Williams]

Interesting and unique. It's cogent advice to the self-centered, "The world ain't spinning round you" and the reference to thinking everything is a mirror of yourself.
Well done.

[Rikkevi Rue]

interesting approach. i feel that it has a greater potential than you have realized here. You could draw more "performance" out if this work because it has a greater potential. Many of the very best and most famous poets and authors rewrite pieces and draw more out of them. consider it

[Midnight_Mystery]

i enjoyed it, nice job! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. The gift of advice at a ending with someone should be listen to. I like the statements made in the poem.
"However, not everything is a bless
Keep your eyes open before you run -
We're always right and wrong"
A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote