A Few Months Are Several Days

Lovey-dovey lyrics. Read 'Writer's Note'.

When the dawn breaks in
I forget my name and who I am
So shallow within,
They call me Hollow Man.

It's been like Spring without
blossoming, a day without sparkle
My life's a broken tape
Colour fading and silent voices
I can only hear the empty noises

I think I know - something is missing
My heart's metalic-crimson,
All cold, slightly diseased
And the melting cure is always you.
You say, 'It's not that bad
I'll be back someday,
It's maybe just a few months,
I'll be there, so wait'

But a few months are several days
What does it take to kill inside
What's meant to live in pain?
A few months can change history
So how could I know if in a few months
You'd still want to come and live with me?

In a few months you'll miss my birthday
In a few months the Spring and heat are over
In a few months there won't be today
These holy tears will dry,
the uniqueness will fade away

Insecure and paranoid, shivering like a dog
Clingy wirey boy, dazed and confused
They say I just keep mumbling cliches
But is it really hard to see

That a few months are several days
Each second of my life I'm loving you
So it's a real long way
But even if a few months are several days
All I can say, is
You know you're worth the wait.

Author's Note

Lovey-dovey LYRICS. It's not a poem, it's a lyric. It's a simple portrait of a young man's anxiety and fear of losing his loved one.

P.S.: It's quite 'teeny', I know. But it's written from the perspective of a teenager boy.

Reviews

[Moonflower]

I really liked this piece. Well structured and overall
good lyrics.
I felt like the beginning was very strong and colored with lovely metaphors whereas a little towards the end I felt it got a bit weaker. I think if you went back and revised it, this piece would be incredible

[These Haunted Hallways]

Wow, such a loving, yet bittersweet poem. Excellent imagery, cause i can see everything in this piece. Awesome words that flowed from one into the next as well. Cool piece! :)

M.

[LovelySparrow]

I really enjoyed this piece. It was well structured and before I even read your author notes I pictured this as a song. Beautiful emotions portrayed in this. Great job! :)

[Sunni Davis]

I definitely hear music when I read this. The words are so heartfelt and sweet.

[sushi]

wonderful....

[trainwreck]

The lyrics were really well put together. Thank you for sharing.

[Karina Longo]

@ Moonflower - thanks for the review. :)
I made a few changes!

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

Waiting through those passing months and counting the days, they are only several days but they feel like years. Each day seems like a week while waiting to be by the side of a loved one. Excellent poem.

[Dahlia Phoenix]

So beautiful...I love it.
Man, you have passion for your writing.