Carbon Dioxide

Heavier than air

lies the silent dichotomy

of suicidal birth

Reviews

[V.B.]

I was hesitant to read this tonight because it is 4AM and I really should get to sleep, but I accidentally clicked and figured it was short enough to merit a review now.

My first reaction is that this poem met haiku in a back alley and told it to f**k off. I am intrigued by the concept of suicidal birth. I think that's probably a good description for how I am going to feel in a couple of hours when I wake up to go to work.

[Chloe]

A phenomenal use of wording. I really enjoyed this work of art very much. You should submit it to my contest for Symbolism.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

yes and we are slowly killing ourselves with it.....well done

[Sukriti Suki]

We produce it, yet it's what kills us! Not even mechanically but biologically...got me thinking for a while. Nice one!

[Karina Longo]

Yay, John, you got it! Yeah, basically, that's what I was trying to say. There's also another meaning, more 'dramatic', but one of the meanings is perfectly described in your words.

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

Holy s**t! This was a slap in the senses. My take on this is: the polluted earth is a slow suicide for the newly born. Let me know if I'm remotely close.

Jarring, excellent work.