Torn Reflections of Burnt Out Trash

Title inspired by a line on lyrics 'Roses in the Hospital'. All further content right from my twisted mind. :)

Sleeping candlelights
and opium-scent made in China
old incenses - bedrooms as hidden sects -
a personal bailey.
Restless pedestal elevating numb feelings
and porcelain attempts of carving
fearful perspectives -
wisdom cracks like thin ice.

Distorted guitar solos - here lies a naked song,
hear the fingerprints
Reaching out strings, so angry,
full of restricted meaning
Yet like a well-educated, bright
variation of compulsive wankering.

Destroy impetus and draw a perfect
yelling out of a crucifix
Create suffering - blood wasting -
Put it all on the washing-machine
And wear again your armour of pain
It smells like sweet nursery.

Take off all the vanity trash in shape of H&M's
Skin wrapping, self-controlled as diets -
natural velvet exquisite pigmented flash
Shaved heads, and smiles reflecting like
a torn, burnt out bouquet of
forever-silent dahlias.

Author's Note

Title inspired by a line on lyrics 'Roses in the Hospital'. All further content right from my twisted mind. :)
P.S.: Do you think I should set this as 'Mature''? Your opinion is very important. Thanks.

Reviews

[Alice In My Own Wonderl..]

"Distorted guitar solos - here lies a naked song,
hear the fingerprints
Reaching out strings, so angry,
full of restricted meaning
Yet like a well-educated, bright
variation of compulsive wankering."

This stanza was great. I found myself a little confused by this poem though. Probably because I have never heard of the song =P. But I enjoyed reading this. Keep writing! :)

[Arabdha]

"porcelain attempts of carving
fearful perspectives -
wisdom cracks like thin ice"..

"Distorted guitar solos - here lies a naked song.."
the lines are just amazing..could quote the entire poem..! i think you make the reader experience an intensity of conflict thats hard to put to words..you should be proud of this one..:)

[MAC]

is this the piece you are proud of?? if not add it to your list! btw, your twisted mind is brilliant. what an original thought process and i do love this style of writing.

[Patches I'm not so new..]

You can if that would make you feel more comfortable bu I see nothing wrong with leaving it where it is--- But then I do not quite get the idea of the poem
save that it has a sense of hopelessness about it Is this a death ward in a hospital if so than the poem makes sense but if I am mistaken than----?

[Bejn Jonathon Edwards]

Nicky and Richey would be proud :)

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

What a wonderful mind bender you have penned here.........this is exquisite!

[Sukriti Suki]

I like this..very clear and very good imagery used here...nice!

[Sel Whiteley]

Wow, this is really intense. The imagery is astounding, so intriguing, so vivid. A wonderful poem thank you for sharing

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

A trip through the mind corridors, taking us to the darkest rooms. Excellent poem my friend and a favourite.