Torn Reflections of Burnt Out Trash

Title inspired by a line on lyrics 'Roses in the Hospital'. All further content right from my twisted mind. :)

Sleeping candlelights
and opium-scent made in China
old incenses - bedrooms as hidden sects -
a personal bailey.
Restless pedestal elevating numb feelings
and porcelain attempts of carving
fearful perspectives -
wisdom cracks like thin ice.

Distorted guitar solos - here lies a naked song,
hear the fingerprints
Reaching out strings, so angry,
full of restricted meaning
Yet like a well-educated, bright
variation of compulsive wankering.

Destroy impetus and draw a perfect
yelling out of a crucifix
Create suffering - blood wasting -
Put it all on the washing-machine
And wear again your armour of pain
It smells like sweet nursery.

Take off all the vanity trash in shape of H&M's
Skin wrapping, self-controlled as diets -
natural velvet exquisite pigmented flash
Shaved heads, and smiles reflecting like
a torn, burnt out bouquet of
forever-silent dahlias.

Author's Note

Title inspired by a line on lyrics 'Roses in the Hospital'. All further content right from my twisted mind. :)
P.S.: Do you think I should set this as 'Mature''? Your opinion is very important. Thanks.

Reviews

[Alice In My Own Wonderl..]

"Distorted guitar solos - here lies a naked song,
hear the fingerprints
Reaching out strings, so angry,
full of restricted meaning
Yet like a well-educated, bright
variation of compulsive wankering."

This stanza was great. I found myself a little confused by this poem though. Probably because I have never heard of the song =P. But I enjoyed reading this. Keep writing! :)

[Rossen]

This is good for all that love to read fine poetry
you have made a wonderful poem and I thank you
for sharing it! nice cue di graw

[Lilly Negoi]

wow! the entire poem is very well structured - but those last lines are just amazing!! i'm envious for that "burnt out bouquet of/ forever-silent dahlias"!
and no - don't rate it mature.

[Sunni Davis]

Wow, this is truly amazing! As for setting it as mature.... I wouldn't because its not openly violent or sexual. Those things are mostly subtle, underlining aspects. The most powerful parts are your words. Terrific poem, dear!

[Dahlia Phoenix]

Just wonderful. Wonderful.

[trainwreck]

Great job my dear.

[BriAnna Wyble]

this is absolutely amazing. i love every bit of it! the description and word usage is flawless. well done!