{peculiar perspective}

poetically lost my mind

the perfectly punctual prosperous porcupine

picked away at polluted flower planes along his pantry

wanting to purchase pastries with pennies from ponies

{but they denied him ever so}

such purple peonies were planted with promise

yet paper thin pickle pies were promptly forgotten

when panthers pranced passionately amongst them

{still they denied me a show}

many panicked people run parallel to a precious life

passing pomegranates after pious power

with pompous patience prickling their prowess

{they are denied what they know}

Reviews

[schlanks]

Densely populated with wonder and curious scenery, this poem demands a reader to take their time to digest what each line has to offer. It reads like a lost track on PATD's album Pretty. Odd., which is meant as a compliment from me as I love that album (they had a much more sophisticated lyricist back then). Very enjoyable read.

[living lavender]

i love PATD ~ i am so flattered :)
"densely populated with wonder" has to be the most poetic compliment ever. {thank you}

[FlaLover]

You are so talented!
This is very unique. I don't believe I will ever be able to write like this...my mind is one directional. Lol
I love this!

[living lavender]

welcome to my mind ~ oops. sorry. you can never leave now. lol
but seriously thank you :) you are too kind.
{i am glad i could make someone smile}

[FlaLover]

I truly enjoy your work!

[living lavender]

thank you for your kindness as always babe :]

[Thomas W Case]

Superb use of alliteration and fun poem.

[living lavender]

thank you :] i am glad you enjoyed it.

[emmajoygreen]

A wonderfully clever and amusing poem. Would be ideal for small children to learn, sing and dance to, Imagine doing a series of them.. you'd be famous in no time, living lavender.

[living lavender]

thank you beautiful :)
you may have struck an idea there ~ my insanity knows no bounds. so the alphabet may or may not be my muse for the next couple of writes.
{we shall see}

[Chris Shaw]

Well, that is positively the most prolific and prolonged alliteration I have seen in a long time. You are an expert, and what a tongue twister too. Now I need to work on the meaning, living lavender. Porcupines now aren’t they a bit prickly?

Chris

[living lavender]

thank you for such kind words as always.
why yes. they positively are ;)

[John the Baptist]

Alliteration is an effective device, but overdone it detracts from the poem. Of course, when meant for comedic effect, which I think was your intent, there are no restrictions.

[living lavender]

true and true :)
this one felt good to write without boundaries.

[Davidgeo]

I always love it when people lose their minds. It's usually the best way to truly get to know someone. For good or bad

[living lavender]

i agree with this.
just don't poke the bear when it believe it's a tiger.

[willweb]

This one is promising. : ) Fun poetry and quite creative. The Ps have it. : )

[living lavender]

hahaha thank you for your review and i just saw you purple promising poem too!! i knew i could have made this longer ~ many "P's" left out!
{oh the Possibilities hahah}

[Stu. T.H.]

I have yet to make out the shape of your poem, but surely I will. Because though the scenery's abstract, I caught glimpses of familiar feelings I have once adorned in your poem. Perhaps, I will understand one day, if someone allows me. Thank you for sharing your work, author living lavender, I wish you a nice day.

[living lavender]

i will give you a hint my friend:
when reading this playful piece of a poem ~ simply read the first two stanzas through the lenses of a childlike tongue twister using the letter "P" ~ the last stanza is the only pretentious thought-provoking part.
{as always. thank you for stopping by.}