Written On The Walls

I can feel it in the air

While I hear it in my mind

And it's written on the walls;

Staring directly into the mirror

Facing back stands a creature

Unknowingly searching to find

A girl buried deep inside

One day, that's all I ask

To somehow make the magic last

Won't you allow a smile to stay

Keep it from always fading away

Nighttime terrors still remain

Hoping to finally, someway be saved

Siblings feeding from the lonely

Take me from the darkness only

Leave now while you've got the chance

Turn around without a second glance

Cuz' you are bound to feel my hurt

Leave one eye open, wide and alert 

Reviews

[Sarah Nicole Nadler]

Wow, there is intense emotion here, I like that.

[Distant horizons]

Feeling the eyes being the window to the soul/true self is a recurring theme in your writes, and i totally agree. you use it to such great effect in your writing.
ps...sorry if this is wrong. i don't really like talking about my opinion of what is someone elses writing, which can be a very personal thing. Just an observation. excellent write.

[Nostrovia]

Good poem Liz. I'm about your age (a junior in high school). I enjoyed this piece, and finding another poet my age with talent. Thanks for the read

[kasanova]

I dig it :D

[Saya]

This is really good. Your a year younger then me too. Very talented. it was very smoothly going. just really good.

[Alex]

Wow. You're just a little older than me, and you already write this good? I wonder if I can do that too..
What I liked here is the smooth flow of your poem. The words you used, I think, weren't just randomly picked. It fitted perfectly. Yes, the emotion here is strong, it's sad, yet so beautifully delivered. I loved the rhymes, especially the last two lines.

[Fabric Pulse]

A favorite of mine. The image is vivid. The writing on the walls the strongest is what'll leave an impact on your heart.

[R.Inc$]

smoothly written

[Brooke Nicole Plummer]

for such a young mind, it's quite expanded. well done.

[Sujash I. Purna]

a nice piece of poetry