Hopeless

She sits alone in the corner.
her soul ripping apart.
Tears stain her cheeks.
blood flows from her wrist down her arm.
she crys in pain and sorrow.
hollow inside she cuts over and over again.
dieing quietly.
wishing for the pain to go away.
Hopeing maybe someone cares.
but it's hopeless...

Author's Note

i guess it's good... what do you thinK?

Reviews

[.]

The poem flows well and the imagery is strong. I may not be one to say cutting is a viable way to fix or solve anything, but I suppose other people may think differently.

- Ash

[Jaiden]

This explains how I used to be all the time. I really enjoy your writing

[Impulse]

Very intense sadness radiates from your words. Of course, it is never good for someone to feel this way. Unfortunately, there are several people in today's world who feel like this. You have a few grammar errors though. "Dieing" should be "dying", and "hopeing" should be "hoping". Other than those, nice job.

[nono]

Very nice, it tells a sad story, and has much emotion. Deep, deep feeling. A real writer can make the reader feel what they want them to. And you did. It's awesome, and I love the strong detail. So dark, and full of pain, but there's
hope-hopeless
love-hate
sad-happy
stupid-smart
There is whatever for whatever, and this only tells one side of it. Nice job! Keep up the awesome work!