My Souls Sorrows

why must it be

in all that i see

despite the reassurance

i feel a strong disturbance

this is not what i had wanted

to feel, myself, unsure 

despite your words i'm haunted

worried by thoughts unpure

for you my actions may seem steady

but here in my head they're not

i worry about relations and feelings

i dont want to feel this way

i dont want this fear

the fear that when you disappear

its intentional

i know its not

i know you have your life

with its complications

but i don't want to mess this up

i dont want to ruin this

like i've done before

this is a fools mind

here outside my head

and i think you'll find

i've more tears than shed

Reviews

[Shannon Leigh]

This was fantastic, it could use a little work but it reaches out to the reader. At least, it reached out to me. There were certain lines that really tugged on my heart and mind.
"i dont want this fear
the fear that when you disappear
its intentional"
that stanza was certainly my favorite along with the last one.
Keep working, I'll be sure to read more of your work ^^

[r]

disturbance makes me think of sexual things. ;3 oh gawd, i love the second stanza! "despite your words i'm haunted worried by thoughts unpure" that just fits me to a T [lolcorny] right now... xD or a lot of the time it does, lawls. i really love that line. awhhh the third stanza, the long one, makes me really really sad. i WANNA HUG YOU. LIKE REALLY BAD. not fair. at all. and the last one makes me really sad too. *hugs...!* ♥♥♥ [aaha by the way this one is beautiful, too xDDD]