Clearly Unavoidable

I recently got news that a classmates father passed away last night. I don't know them well, but I am praying for them.

 

The healthy tears run, chasing each other
like strong, silent streams.

Blue and Clear.

No dam can stop them, though he will try;
an unconscious decision not attempted.

Unavoidable and Destructible.

And in the moments they fall;
stationary, the worlds' abandonment.

 

Author's Note

I simply write what I see and feel. And what I was today was sad yet uplifting.
I in no way mean for this to be offensive.

Reviews

[Aldora Sparrow]

Aww...Very sweet. I really like this poem that it can mean so many things. When I saw the title, my first thought was "this is probably a breakup poem." Boy did you surprise me. So deep and powerful. This really captures the essence of sadness. I really liked how you just mentioned "he" once so it gives a lot of room for imagination and interpretation.

I really think short poems are often better than longer ones because you really have to pick out the right words, like haikus. You are very talented in this area. I almost cried reading this because it was so strong (and I was listening to a sad song which added to the mood XD). Very nice write! Keep it up. (Happy late Turkey day!)

[Momo the Elf]

oh... i'm sorry for your classmate. but this poem is profound. very well written, and equally as powerful. i could almost feel the tears as the streamed down my own face... either way, nicely done.