Pain.

It were only after I had gazed upon such a flawlessness, that I were overcome with the true essence of divinity, serenaded with love and beauty.
And it hurt.
Unbearably so.
For it were in that precise fragmentation that I finally understood what it entailed to truly be unloved.

Reviews

[ANTO]

Very nice writing Luke - the 'fragmentation' - explosive realisation that shatters - excellent choice of words -
'entailed' - Im not sure about (personal opinion - it seems to reduce the aforementioned 'fragmentation')
'unloved' aches a thousand heartbreaks in its simplicity though.
Great piece and so true.

[Luke Cazalet-Smith]

Thank you ever so much for your words. I am both young and naïve, and have a lot to learn. I will take your words into consideration for the future. Again, thank you ever so much for you words, I am truly grateful that you even took the time to read a piece of mine.

[ANTO]

No not at all. We were all setting out - one time.
I would love you to give me some feedback on the suggestions although its NOT manatory lol.
You are a fine poet - Im not picking holes in your work Luke - no way - I was an immeadiate fan
YVW

[Lizardo]

Again, Good Poem, and it's a new description but, true about pain
Great work, I really like this

[Luke Cazalet-Smith]

I can not thank you enough for taking the time to go through my pieces and comment. I am truly grateful. I am glad that my pieces have somewhat of an effect on another being.

[Lizardo]

You are welcome

[Nitesh Mahabal]

Wow!! You Described It So Differently. Emotionally Very Strong Write Up. Nice Work Sir.

[Luke Cazalet-Smith]

Thank you very much for your remark, kind Sir. Your gratitude is highly appreciated.