just one more time

foreclosing on the fun house of life

lightning illuminates the dismal sky

sunset should be hours away

but now plaintive booms of thunder re-adjust life‘s clock

hibiscus petals fly now defiled by pre-storm air

they land - stigmatized - on a now dampened porch

tree limbs sway akimbo beckoning me through raindrops

willing my dreams to dance in the rain

even if with the lowest common denominator of hope

just one more time

 

Reviews

[H.L. Cerveise]

I love the picture you have above the poem. My eyes kept seeing it as I read your words. The word play was terrific, and I can see you took great care in picking just the right words. They related to both the storm in nature and the storm within yourself.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much, H.L. I appreciate your review. Lydi**

[redzone]

those hibiscus flowers are too fragile Lydi, not like us who until there is no denominator left are never common and continue to dance in the rain.. though I must admit at times I wish there was "less adjustment to "time's clock" and more sunshine... it is also fun to dance between the sun's rays..

you have created a very poignant view of the sadness and hope of life... nothing common about this "nice"(ly) worded poem the images do more than float on the wind, they hold onto you long after you've finished reading..

redzone

[Lydia Shutter]

Oh yes, I will always dance in the rain and if those hibiscus flowers shred at my feet, I will make perfume out of them. Thank you for this much more than "nice" review, Curt. Lydi**

[James]

The sad truth about aging I guess. "foreclosing on the funhouse of life", a great way to start. and I love the ending. It's saying "we aren't done yet, there's always one more go round.

Thanks,

[Lydia Shutter]

Yes, there is always tomorrow no matter how old we are. Thank you so much, James. Lydi**

[Jamestown]

Fantastic wording,great image and soothing read:)
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much, James. Lydi**