I won't go far

About me.

I'm told to smile
Does she want me to lie?
I'm not happy-
About to die.

Freedom for others
Means food and shelter
Freedom for me
Means being kept under.

So hide away
Is what I'm told
So pretend you're happy
Is what unfolds.

Keep it all a secret
Hid it far
Do not tell
It is not ment for all.

A day went by
I feel the heat
The lie I told
Will not defeat.

Beg for the truth
Is what they'll do
Who's lieing
The coffin has room for two.

Pehaps I should spill
What's on my mind
Perhaps I could tell
It would be nothing but kind.

 

Author's Note

What do you think overall?

Reviews

[sharleenm]

if you can suffer through it, others should be able to deal with knowing about it.
spilling is a much needed break from the lying

[R.R.Louderback]

I am not a fan of non-rhyming poetry in general, but I thoroughly enjoyed "I Won't Go Far". You had a firm structure and a consistent meter. You had a strong narrative message that made its point firmly and well.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Personally I believe that honesty is not only the best policy but the only policy. " Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve." It's so much easier to tell the truth. I can see the perspective of the narrator but I have no idea of what great secret is being so closely guarded by lies.