The selfs fall

A man journeys to cut down the last tree in the world...the knowledge tree.

The selfs fall

I walked along the middle of the forked path
I held my sanity inside my clenched fist
I held my axe in the other
Into the forest of the demon Lebanon I went
My steps made no noise as I reached the center of the garden
I saw the ripened tree with awe
I resisted the temptation to take a fruit
Instead I began to chip away at the thick bark
My mind surged with knowledge and I began to cry
The artificial forest around me cradled me and sang a lullaby
It tried to stop me but I kept going
Waves of sadness engulfed me as I saw how meaningless I was
How meaningless it was to cut down the knowledge tree
In a decaying universe all I wanted was warmth for myself
My bare naked heart beat slowly
I hacked at the tree rhythmically until it finally fell
At that moment I realized for a moment
I felt the warmth in my heart
An absolute satisfaction
But then the tree fell without a sound
And I was petrified from the cold
Lightning struck me down and I felt a jolt of memory
I felt the warmth of the mother tree as I killed her
She embraced me and carried me to nothingness

Author's Note

What do you think? Any criticism?

Reviews

[Beau Maysey]

Madame, your poetry all are works of art, really, it's embarrassing for novice poets such as I.
Artful narrative, I love the imagery I am getting here; I see the last man on Earth finally climbing this gargantuan architecture that has been built for millennia, the Tower of Babel, and reaching Eden, ready to enact his vengeance. Knowledge of Good and Evil, his a*s, he's bested everything in his way and he's going to take out that last symbol of oppression, that last symbol of nature, that last obstacle of God.
Way to write an inspirational piece. :)

[MADAM]

Wow! Thank you! So much praise >

[Kat Blair]

I feel how the character hurts...well written.

[Shaquana Adams]

Lightning struck me down and I felt a jolt of memory
I felt the warmth of the mother tree as I killed her
She embraced me and carried me to nothingness.

Very nicely written. No criticism whatsoever :)