Gore Soup

**WARNING** If you couldn't tell by the title, this poem is gory (I don't think its bad, but just in case your super sensitive...) Its basically a telling of the effects of the hiroshima bomb...

Gore soup

And with a flash everything went to hell
The burning sensation crawled under my skin in slow motion
My skin melted and festered in fast forward
Everything was gone in a flash and I was left burning
I was dry and evaporated
My clothes were tattered and I felt naked
I couldn't see, and I felt such thirst...
I crawled in agony, holding my hands out like a zombie
I marched blindly for water and cried out, my skin breaking
My eyes felt like they were melting, everything burned like acid, my blood tore through me, trickling down peeled skin. My remaining hair fell off in chunks along with my scalp, and my mind fell like mush
I couldn't even process the amount of pain
The worms began forming in my body, curling up tight against my legs
My bones cracked and cut through sore muscle
The razors inside my body tore me open, blooming flowers of red
My entrails burst and spilled out onto the flowers
A putrid black nectar
Just add water and I'm soup

Author's Note

Thought?

Reviews

[SonOfPlunder]

Brilliantly gruesome imagery. That's good enough for me!

[Nusquam Esse]

This is well done, you did a great job of crafting an image. It doesn't exactly flow that way I would expect a poem to, so I don't know if this is strictly speaking, a poem... but I enjoyed reading it all the same. That was quite the last line! Only one line stood out as not seeming to belong to me, the fifth one, it just seems out of place?

[MADAM]

Well thanks, and as for the 5th line, its there to establish the aftermath, its too awkward without it to me

[A Foiled Soul]

Wow. This was a very intriguing poem. It perfectly depicts the effects of a nuclear weapon. Good job.

[MADAM]

Thank you^^)