invisible touch

written a long ago

your trembling lip 

affect my soul and 

it also start trembling 

when it get your lips warm 

through my finger tips

i get about to cry 

presence of your silky hairy head 

on my chest for looking peace 

wish to believe as a happiest man

and when i get your heart theft hand 

in my hand and i felt you 

in my arm

i just say subconsciously_

someone i touch 

i lost myself 

someone i touch 

i lost my world 

someone i touch 

i lost everything 

but get someone in my heart...

Author's Note

invisible touch:(

Reviews

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

I like your message here, it's tragically romantic. Naturally it stirs something within the reader. But I have to comment on your first stanza, maybe you meant lip rather than leap? and warm rather than worm?

I can only infer the message from what you have written. It's clear yet I guess you can rephrase it more, just a touch of grammar here but overall well done

[KAOlmsted]

Very nice. Thanks for sharing.

[luviva]

ohhhhhhh so sweet yet so sad!!
i loved the layout of the poem and the feelings portrayed are real good!
thanxx for sharing

[Salar Majak]

awwwwww so very beautifuly sad feelings in here :'( made me tear up! great poem, and a very good structure :)

[Dayran]

To think in the local and translate that into English sometimes causes something to be lost and sometimes adds to it. Sigh! Sometimes it does both.

[C.R.Turner]

This is hauntingly beautiful. I'm not sure whether English is not your first language, or whether you have a very unique syntax and style here, but whatever you're doing, keep doing it! Beautiful effect here.

[RachelReaper]

you have a way of opening your heart and letting your emotions ring out loud and clear, that's a wonderful quality in a poet

[quinfinn]

but oh, so visible on the soul and heart of a man in love...nicely done!

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

No, no, no... sorry. This one doesn't work (for me). It's the grammar - it's horrible. Almost like a v.001.001 lyric generator gone haywire. You've done much better than this. Take a break. Work on your English grammar and give it another go. Other than that, it's great! :D

[gombeggar]

hmm...the grammer could be an issue...but in this instance i think it adds to things, just my opinion of course