Speeding by

Grow fond of today as we look for tomorrow

Séance of whispers teeming with sorrow

 

Dewy blades kneel calm and still

While whirling winds bend iron will

 

Haunting thoughts plague solemn night

Vivid visions burning bright

 

Grains of sand slip through my fingers

Course and brittle flavor lingers

 

Raving mad clenched fists are flailing

Caught in widow’s web unfailing

 

A world away and seas apart

But only inches from the start

 

To live succumbing to a lie

Or wave as I go speeding by

Author's Note

For those days when you wish you could just drive away.

Reviews

[eaglepoet]

Hey there. I hope it's alright if I offer some thoughts on this piece.

First, I like rhyme scheme you utilized throughout the poem. Simple, yet beautiful and never forced. I think you present the belief that life's challenges, can make us feel like we have to run or hide from them. My one point of concern is that I feel as if you could have better-explored issues that might cause people to have this reaction. A way to accomplish might be to connect what you've already written to a story or series of stories. Draw on situations you and others have had to battle in life. What made you want to run? Drive away? Hide? What lessons did you learn from those points in time? Overall, a solid write that could be even better with redevelopment.

[M.H. Bones]

Thank you for the feedback! I really appreciate it. I wrote the poem with a past relationship in mind, but I tried to write it so that it can be interpreted in other ways as well.

I will definitely take your suggestions and take another look at the poem. I really do appreciate your insight. That's why I made this page!