Chapter (2) THE I PHONE

THIS ONE WAS WRITTEN AS AN EXPERIMENT. I CALLED IT " FILL THE REST IN YOURSELF" AT FIRST , BUT IT DIDN'T FEEL RIGHT.

THE  I  PHONE

 

RAIN

TEEN

SPEED

PHONE

 

BEND

SLIDE

HEDGE

LUCKY

 

 

POLICE

COURT

LICENSE

WALKING

Reviews

[ANTO]

I think its commensurate with the theme of the write M.E.
I have seen poems comprised of two words per line and they work fine.

As it stands it looks like a list but all it requires is that the reader work that bit harder - now I can see what you meant by 'fill in the rest...'. I got the story in its entirety from this

You're pushing the envelope - kudos for that

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Wow thank you so much. I was inspired after I'd attended a similar crash. So happy you liked it.

[ANTO]

You're welcome.
I could not do your job - special applause for that I think M.E. - you are overworked and under-appreciated in this day and age.

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Wish you were my boss. It is sometimes a VERY hard job, clearing up after a fatal accident for example. The good part is helping people to continue their journey after a breakdown.

[ANTO]

The bosses quickly forget their old comrades on the front lines.

[Marie]

I think it works as a poem and as a story.

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

AS AN EXPERIMENT I THINK IT WORKED.
AS A POEM I'M NOT SO SURE.

PLEASE COMMENT TRUTHFULLY.
THANK YOU.