Chapter (14) EARTH LOSS

WRITTEN FOR THE POETRY CHALLENGE. A RE WORKING OF " I HEARD A TREE CRY"

EARTH LOSS

 

Through the grieving valley a failed river flows

Where, no longer, man nor beast is seen.

Beside the troubled waters an ancient tree still grows

not now strong, nor straight, and crown of feeble green.

 

Bare branches, weakened, the winter frosts festoon

Till spring brings hope and twiglets show their lessening shoots of green

Summer days too hot do make the leaves to swoon,

and winds do scatter autumns colours across the scene.

 

No birds build nests between her leaves, 
no insects for pollen search, no mice nor even fungus slime. 
She stands alone and in mountains' shadow grieves 
while once green earth, ravaged, rotates in space and time

 

She is the last, earths' memorial to times gone by

Mans' greed had caused the earth to bare this cross

Like ancients prayer, her arms outstretched towards the sky.

And the mountain groans incomparable loss

Author's Note

ESPECIALLY RE WORKED FOR A CHALLENGE. HOPE YOU LIKE.

Reviews

[Briana O'Connor]

The darkness add great emphasis the story within. There is great power amongst each line. Very well done.

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Many thanks for reading and a great review.

[Lyn Anderson]

I really like this. It is very dark and powerful. A solemn piece.

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Thank you for reading and a great comment.

[Frieda P]

This is wonderful social commentary, Mother Earth is tearing up in your poetic words. Such a stark reality, sad, and we're all to blame...

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Thanks for reading. I needed to write this.

[Frieda P]

It's a luverly read, albeit bittersweet....

[RayXor]

this felt very much like a slightly brighter poe poem. i loved it!

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Thank you for reading and a great compliment.

[RayXor]

no problem at all

[timthy]

wow! very well arranged. i really enjoyed reading this and it is very pertinent to the travesty that greed has caused...some times i feel as if i am that tree , reaching up my feeble limbs in despair...great piece...wonderful read!!

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

I sometimes feel that nobody in power anywhere gives a damn about our world. They talk a lot, but never DO anything. I feel that this earth has no long term future. Than ks for the great comment.

[Sami Khalil]

A severe loss indeed dear poet. It will affect all of us. Then we have to build our memorial too after that. Excellent...:)....

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Until the little people, that's you and me, take over the power away from governments, our world has no future. This won't happen. The human race will destroy itself and the earth will return to it's primeval state. Within 50,000 years of the human demise NOTHING will remain as evidence that we ever existed.

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...).....................

[Marie]

I know that I did read this before. A very effective poem.

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Yes it's been changed quite a lot. I think it's much better now.

[HungryGhost]

Wow, I totally loved the way you captured me with that first line right up until that last one :) Could you please review my latest? Thanks :)

[MomzillaNC]

Awesome! Seems that line caught more than one fellow poet's fancy. I think it's been about half the members who've answered the challenge so far have chosen that line.