Timing

The music was loud and your voice tempting. 

The prejudice was strong and your charm delighting.

The crowd was big and your eyes fascinating.

The night was warm and your smile glowing.

Almost did I not close the door. 

Almost did I kiss you.

Almost did I let you in.

Almost did I fight my fear.

Told myself that it's for the best and that the timing wasn't right.

Told myself I find someone else.

Told myself that I then will get it right.

Told myself you would have hurt me anyway.

Then one day we saw each other again and I knew the only thing I was and am right about is this:

Timing is a b***h.

Reviews

[Jamie D.W.]

Ow. Haven't we all experienced something like this in the past (unless you haven't dated anyone yet, that is)?

It does make me pick up a hidden question, though: is it really the timing or is it you who were indecisive? Interesting. The more I think about this, the more this question becomes apparent in my mind. When I finished reading, it made me ask, "why blame it all on timing?" Nevertheless, I can hear the bitterness in the viewpoint character's voice and I understand. Fully.

I'm a bit confused on "Almost did I not close the door," though, but it's just a minor nitpick. Still holds up, regardless.

[LadyT]

Well I used "Almost did I not close the door" to show the decision not to date that person after he brought the character home or more percise letting him close enough to do so.

And "blaming" it on timing in the end is my way to express that both are wrong and still noboy really is.

Thank so much for you're comment! Makes me so happy to see my work is understood so well.

[Joey K]

I like the poem, it's something many people would understand. For me anyway, this made it predictable, but I enjoyed it nonetheless. Plus it's very descriptive and the punch made me scoff, was it supposed to make me laugh?

Nice LadyT

[Nikhona]

Lol I love the twist and your rhythm

[Alan]

Interesting...a bad first date perhaps? LOL. Btw..I always thought karma was a b***h and timing was a mother f***er .

[LadyT]

Haha thanks it was a party at the village I grew up in and he was the older brother of a friend. We hit it off, but I was scared of letting anyone close and he met someone else. This happend a second time, though I still miss him and he taught me a f***ing lot.

[Alan]

what kind of place did you grow up in where the VILLAGE has a party? I wanna go..lol