Precious

Don't miss out on what you have in front of you. Cherish and let time take you both by surprise. Time is precious so remember one anothers wishes.....

 

Time became precious when you held me

A gallery of obstacles, we had freed

We forcefully kept climbing over our struggles

Shattered doubtful eyes of yesterday

 

You became my night and day

An art of eternal love, we painted

We passionately swept life by the hands

Planted our soul deep in Julio native sand

 

Time became precious when you inspired me

A valley of miracles, we had followed

We mentally savor one another texture

Cut away our battle cries with communication

 

Your lips became my drug of choice each session

A conviction, we had both favored

We finally appreciated little moments of life

Restored our faith in God hands

 

Time became precious when you cradled my heart

A hollow tree, we had watered

We developed a rare friendship

That is more precious to me

Then the gallery of obstacles I may

Never conquer

Author's Note

This piece means a lot to me. I wrote it for a girlfriend of mine. About her and the guy she with. True love is hard to find, so I wanted to write something more then the love they feel. I wanted to lose herself in her shoes for awhile... ;) Enjoy!

Reviews

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

Gorgeous Anna! The first "Time became precious....." really struck me because of the content of the first sentence, so I liked it as a reoccurring theme! Very beautifully written and with your insight on the relationship, this friend is VERY lucky!

"Time became precious when you cradled my heart
A hollow tree, we had watered
We developed a rare friendship
That is more precious to me
Then the gallery of obstacles I may
Never conquer"

You are such an intelligent writer!

[Arthur Crow]

This is very touching and moves mountains... such expression is timeless as true love surely is - something I have only had a glimpse of, but this piece is inspiring. Bravo!

[M. Amphet Salt]

Sorry I'm just getting caught in school.

This is the best piece I have read of yours. It is beautiful. When did you lose the seduction? Na really I like this and I can really relate to it in a way today that my heart is broken.

Good Write, Anna

H. Duane Sharpe

[An owl on the moon]

Beautifully expressed, deeply moving, and visually stunning! So wonderful to read about love that endures and grows deeper by the day...

[Markymark]

My first read of you anna. I like this piece alot. It could have been you from the feeling you put in it. I flows nicely and the message is beautiful. The only snafu I see is line eleven. SHould read "one another's" I think.

Beautiful INk...can't wait to see more.

Markymark

[17thWhitePrince]

WoW !!!

"Time became precious when you held me"
"You became my night and day"
"Time became precious when you inspired me"
"Your lips became my drug of choice each session"
"Time became precious when you cradled my heart"

Such Beautiful Lines Indeed !!!
What A Marvel It Was To Read !!!

What A Most Wonderful Piece !!! Indeed !!!

[DavidRyan]

This is very well written. I like it. I like the idea of writing from someone else's point of view, about something THEY'RE experiencing. Yet, even though it's not you, you capture the emotion and the bond between the two beautifully. I hope she liked this as much as I do.

[Walkingblind]

This is so 'precious' as you writefully put it!! I cant believe you say your
poetry isn't raw. Come on It's been a long time since I've read such an
innocently sweet poem, I wanted to drawn myself in every line. Your
friend must be so happy, I dont know if I could stand being around them
for long!!! Great poem!

[Kelley]

Friendship is very important in love.
I think you captured this quite well.
I hope your friend loved this Anna?

I did thanks for sharing.
Kelley

[These Haunted Hallways]

WoW Anna! This was incredible!! Very beautiful words :) Love is such an amazing thing. There are so many feelings involved that make it beautiful. And to actually experience the real thing....boy, it must be so beautiful...and it IS beautiful :)

Just wished it'd happen to me =/

Lovely hun :)

B.A.