New comer.

New comer, oh new comer,
wat have yu done?
It's all ruined.
New comer, oh new comer,
whyy meh?
New comer, oh new comer
this cannot be.
Please oh please new comer.
Why has this happened to me.

Reviews

[Wolfwind]

Another hastily written piece that brings to mind the sudden shock of falling for the new stranger in town, while emotions still run deep for the past love. It creates the sense of being a pancake, that sudden flipped over feeling and a new heat. Once again I think the misspellings enhance the piece, showing it's fast pace. I also like the repetition of lines, for it reminds me of the fast skipping heart beat of a new emotional situation. Nice Ink!

Keep writing!
Aaron =)

[Rachel]

Thank you.