Life

My first ever Tanka

Life                                                 (Tanka)

I walked and I walked,

Tears are gone and life's been fixed,

Success was so close,

With hard work, I reached my goal,

Now I stand tall and so proud.

Author's Note

This is my first time writing a Tanka, so let me know for any mistakes...

Reviews

[MCS]

Well, done wise old soul!

[Martiya Daman]

Thanks for your review, MCS!

[Dylan Macadham]

I didn't know what a Tanka was, I googled it.
5-7-5-7-7 Syllables, Perfect!
And a "Life" well-written, Martiya! :))

[Dylan Macadham]

... When are you going to post a new poem? :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Nicely done...a poem that sounds like it was written by someone with more age and much experience.
j.

[Martiya Daman]

Thanks for sharing your thoughts J. I am only 9 but still know how sucess sounds like.

[Betty Hermelee]

This poem shows me that thought, persistence and hard work equals success for you… and most of us… no use moaning, get up and fix it and you will appreciate your efforts!
Warmly
B🌷

[Martiya Daman]

Thanks for sharing your thoughts and taking your time, Betty.

[Betty Hermelee]

Wry mature and quite thoughtful for your age. Bravo!😊🌷🌷🌷🌷🌷keep writing!
Warmly
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[Martiya Daman]

Thanks so much! I know how sucess feels like so...