Goodbye Laguna Canyon

hills somber shadow

wind chuckles through creeping grass

wilderness heart weeps 

Reviews

[kristollini]

Another great piece! This one imparts a sense of mystery and longing with the words you used to personify the different elements of the haiku. I particularly enjoy the second line - it makes me think of the sounds of wind as laughter weaving its way through tall blades of grass. Great job on this haiku!

[Maya]

Thank you. I wrote this a few days before my year long excursion in England. I had forgotten how much I enjoyed driving through Laguna Canyon until I realized I couldn't do it for a while.

[¿]

Seems like you're gonna master at haiku!!
All the secret and mysterious longing described in just that short...amazing!☺

[Coyote Poetry]

I like how you use the language. You give enough to open up the imagination and places of mystery. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Perkele.7885]

Length does not matter....in poetry either! It is the quality of the piece; short or long, though a WIDE phrase might help in the final analysis!

[Willard Wells]

Well, you have me now. Two excellent works. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Well done, perfect form, count, the flow of Haiku. The short verse is one of my favorites and you do it very well.

[Maya]

Thank you for your kind assessment. I tend to only write short poems, maybe one day I will branch out.

[Willard Wells]

I have gone backwards and have been writing shorter verse. I find it helps me with longer pieces by helping to eliminate excess words.