Lifeless Cube

The Sunlight passes through the tube,

 Making a glowing sphere on my wall.

I sit in the corner,

Inside this lifeless cube

Ink flows through steel nib,

On the blank papers

My thoughts crawl…

Reviews

[amrit]

wow! this is what a real art looks like when u dont have to take anything in consideration , just the flow u r going in ..

[Mayank]

thanks mate :)

[Jennie Baron]

Your metaphor is so apt and your choice of words very appropriate, and this flows very well when read aloud. Well done!

[Mayank]

Thanks Jennie! Glad you liked it.

[hardeep sabharwal]

very nice,
I really liked it

[Mayank]

Thank you Hardeep

[Blue Ivory]

Yes that is how written art is formed. I like how you ended it. The last line leaves us with visual food for thought.

[Mayank]

thank you so much :)

[Matching Socks]

Beautiful my friend, the metaphors used to describe that feeling within your own self.

[Mayank]

thank you Ana :)

[Stonz P.]

Now, this was good and what I was telling you about the brevity of a piece and the impact even the littlest of pieces can have.
Would just like to know what 'tube' stands for because is it about solitude inside:
1. a room?
2. yourself?

A better write than your other pieces.

[Mayank]

Its myself, I used room as a metaphor.

[Briana O'Connor]

This is a truly an alluring expression of solitude. I myself love being alone in my room writing, reading and letting my mind create pictures that I don't have to be judged for. Very well done. Thank you for sharing and keep up the good work!

[Mayank]

thanks Briana

[Sophy Freebirds]

We writers need our quite time always.. many of us prefer to be in melancholy mood. The darkness of this poem is really deep. It is like it is in your veins... well written :)

~Sophy

[Mayank]

thanks sweets ;)

[Sophy Freebirds]

Was a pleasure buddy ;)

[uNmAsKeD-dEluSiOns]

I feel like this is really deep- well it is- It's really a great writing. I love the last line "My thoughts crawl" This piece is really inspiring. I love how it's just pure truth, it's so real. The sadness is so powerful, well said

[Mayank]

thank you friend...