Come Sail Away

~~~
The pitch o' night her captain feared
her leeward pending doom

November's raging breath
ensnared
to daunting reef she loomed

Her belly shattered
pitched and gorged
as raging swells
reclaim

The drift of break
flew
blizzard cold
~
"Come Sail Away"
is her name
~

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Come Sail Away'
McEltic,
It seems with boats, ships, sailing crafts-
that they are given the names of ladies
or perceived as such. Names which are
lovingly-carefully painted upon them.
This you have created is one where I
imagine this sail boat has maybe been enjoyed
and cherished as family and friends have fished
or even made money from their labors.
The end of it's usefulness is painted as the tragedy it is.
Like a living thing within "November's raging breath'
Then in next stanza:
Her belly shattered 'pitched and gorged
as raging swells
reclaim
the drift of bread
flew
blizzard cold"
Then the identity and reality sealed with loss and tears...
a very moving tribute to her.
"Come Sail Away" is her name"
Touching piece. I could not help but think of all the people
whom have died in the seas as well
Beautiful and moving to the heart.
Blessings,
Kathy

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

I’m onboard ...I can feel the swell all around- was stuck in a 15 ft swell crossing over from Panama Canal into The Inside Passage on way go Alaska for three days... say nomore- exciting scene you’ve set , enjoyed reading 🌹

[McEltic]

Amazing how fast and furious the weather can change... :)

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

The sea is a wonderful and dangerous thing🌹

[emipoemi]

Another gem! Indeed written beautifully and every word packs a great punch! Well done!

[McEltic]

Thank you ... sometimes it’s better to let the reader apply all the extra words needed to fashion a true image

[emipoemi]

my philosophy exactly!

[MsJewel]

I love the wonder flow of your words - fabulous when read aloud. Well done :) Julie

[McEltic]

Thanks Julie, i saw a sailboat docked at the marina once, by that name. It gave the inspiration to write this piece with the little twist on the name :)