Safe

He cracked open his sternum

and pried apart his ribs.

"I have made you a home."

He closed his ribs carefully around her,

"for safe keeping,"

and sewed shut his skin.

Reviews

[¿]

You've the wonderful talent of expressing lengthy feelings in just few words and lines....
Love can go to which extend I never know but reading this one makes me feel none can ever measure that to exact.... You nailed this one! Thanks for sharing :)

[Melissa]

Thank you :)

[¿]

Welcome 😘

[YoungWriter.]

Incredible! hit's right to heart. You have a wonder with wonders, exellent job (:

[mel_central]

Insanely good, painted quite the poetic picture!

[Melissa]

Thank you!

[Chris Shaw]

I hope his rib cage was for protection and not imprisonment. Very original thinking here Melissa. I liked it.

Chris

[Melissa]

Thank you for the read. I was hoping that this poem would leave some ambiguity as to whether this is a safe haven or a prison, and I'm happy to see that I did not completely fail at that.

[Neville]

Gives a whole new meaning to the saying... 'Love the skin you are in' ...don't ya fink........Neville

[Melissa]

XD I hope she loves that skin! Otherwise she's in a gruesome prison :|

[Neville]

.............:)

[Iam-me]

Wow, a direct, dramatic and powerful piece of a poem. That tells you straight without a doubt your safe.

[Melissa]

Thank you for reading!

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

This is striking in its profundity, so few words yet replete with meaning. I think it’s absolutely beautiful.

[Melissa]

Your review is too kind. Thank you :)

[Relic]

This reminded me of the sting song--The Lazarus heart. Lots of love in this one, Melissa. :)

[Melissa]

I see the connection! Thank you for pointing that out and thank you for the read!

[Relic]

My pleasure. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is so romantic...like Adam giving of his rib to make Eve...the sanctuary within the skin.
j.

[Melissa]

I really like your interpretation of this. Thank you!