Rupture

 

 

Rupture

 

From a scummy brown park bench,

In a marijuana haze,

I watch a mangy brindle stray dine

On his own feces,

And wonder

If God

Has forsaken me.

Reviews

[theunionisloud]

The picture says it all. Shiiiiiiiiiiiit.

[Esoteric Strand]

That image is messing with my mind. It's like the hobo and the garbage can are free-floating and the shadows don't match.

Anyhow, I love the tone and brevity. That last part has a twist to it and my mind ping-pongs as to the 'true' meaning.

[iamkim]

short but strong! amazing!

[Emily B]

it is a bleak view of the world, but extremely well written

[Kerry O'Connor]

You present a painful viewpoint with your brave pen.

[Casper]

Again, interesting. Your writing has a very uncommon flow to it. I haven't read anything like yours before. I like it. I like different writing. Very nice work, Mechanical.