rain sex whisper flight

      from behind laughing eyes

    I

                                 stare

                       down

                   at

sweat-sheened heaven

 

(gasp)(grasp)(let it begin)

 

twitchy life enmeshed

in a song of light

nectar taints pain

flop in the love muck

 

heart stops/starts fresh

slide smooth/crash hard

wicked innuendo

disquiet the soul corpse

 

I have seen dreams

ant-sized miracles

dance on your taste buds

dissolve in your bile

 

watch my body scream

like fire from a cloud

as my ice-colored shame

tails the comet to glory

 

when I have slithered,

crawled, hopped, and ran

with your name in my veins

like combustible fuel

 

you will wither on my back

and become dragon wings

and we’ll fly to the edge

of this angel-fucked lie

 

(gasp)(grasp)(let it all end)

 

there’ll be nothing more

      to do

              but

                    fall

                         with

                          newborn rain

 

 

Reviews

[OT]

ah so raw - so brilliant - "heart stops/starts fresh
slide smooth/crash hard" and then the almost drum roll finale - "when I have slithered,
crawled, hopped, and ran
with your name in my veins
like combustible fuel

you will wither on my back
and become dragon wings
and we’ll fly to the edge
of this angel-fucked lie" - before the sliding last stanza as we slowly drip out of the scene to go and write obscene things about you on alleyway walls because we're jealous! lol

[Vanessa Rico]

Interesting. I am definitely a fan of how this poem was constructed!

[roarke]

...... wow........ not quite there, but..................interestingly, hmm wow.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Delicate and refined, a tamp effort, well done

[Nobody.]

Great poetry bro! Keep em coming.